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Sunlight trickled through the blinds on the small window into the even smaller room. Smoke playfully danced in the slight sunbeams as a gaunt man puffed away at his cigar, he was whispering a prayer, or perhaps a plea, under his breath. I spoke softly in German, asking for entrance into the room. His mouth replied softly in German, but my ears heard only a perfect translation into Cerecian. Fortunately for me, the answer was yes.

I entered cautiously.

The room was plain enough, two chairs, and a table with an ashtray. I took careful steps, letting my feet sink into the carpet, and finally took a seat on one of the two soft chairs. I paused for a moment to sigh and set my holo-record disc beside the ashtray.
The gaunt man finally broke the silence with six choice words which I still remember to this day, "So, which of them sent you?".
"The fourth..." I replied uneasily.
He chuckled mirthlessly, "The fourth eh?...Can't they see I have nothing left to take in the name of King and Country."
"I am not here to take," I replied with a wavering in my voice "I am here to give you an opportunity..."
"Not interested," he interrupted gruffly.
"...to tell your story..." I continued undaunted.
Silence smothered the room, and the gaunt man looked defeated, yet hopeful.
"You really want to hear my story?" he whispered softly, more of a statement than a question.
"Yes, if you would tell it, I would..."
"So... you really want to hear my story." he stated even louder, cutting me off.
"Yes," I stammered "yes I would..."
"Then so be it..."

I barely had time to turn on my holo-recorder before he began the tale of his life.
©2008-2009 ~Writer-on-the-Wall
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Author's Comments

Full Title: A Soldier's Honor #1 - "For King and Country"

This one is all about what happens to those who wish to adventure in the Shattered Universe, yet possess no special abilties, they join the army...

The "gaunt man" was once a mighty warrior, so don't worry, it's not all doom and gloom.

I'm not quite sure where to go with this storyline, so suggestions are welcome...

Not as interested in this one as I am in the normal "Shattered Universe" plot, I will update sporadically if at all...

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:iconvladdyboy:
Wow! short text (a prologue, maybe?) I read it, I really like the story so far... I"m wondering why they're speaking German. Anyways the dialogue is fun to read and though there are some little typographical errors in the text.

I'm glad I know what most of those hard words mean:

Gaunt: Sickly, Starved, Pale, Old (?), Someone (or something) that hasn't eaten in a long time.
Mirthlessly: Mirth= Happiness, Joy... mirthlessly is "without joy or humor"

stammer/undaunted = don't know, but I've heard them enough times to get the gist of what they mean.

I'm guessing Holo-Recorder is like a tape recorder but also like that thing on Star Wars that R2D2 uses to send a Hologram of Leia to Luke & the Gang. Is it anything like that?

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:iconwriter-on-the-wall:
You hit the nail on the head, It's a prolouge, and yes, the holo recorder is like that, only smaller, 'bout the size of an ashtray.

They're speaking german because the "gaunt man"'s first language is german so the U.T. (Universal Translator) is just speeding the conversation along. (and because I've been reading Kafka lately...)

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And then he said, "That's not my wife, that's a tree!" :sarcasm: no...just...no...
:iconvladdyboy:
so far so good! :D

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:iconwriter-on-the-wall:
Undaunted = Not afraid, not daunted

Stammered = same as stuttered

Hope that clears a few things up...

I also plan on continuing this realtively soon, keep your eyes peeled...

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And then he said, "That's not my wife, that's a tree!" :sarcasm: no...just...no...
:iconvladdyboy:
Ahh! thanks! and be sure to copy/paste some of your stuff on Leafworthy.com/ just so you stay active on that site!

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:iconneko-tenshi93:
*O*!!!!!!! I should read more of your gallery! This seems really interesting ^w^

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:iconwriter-on-the-wall:
Many thanks.

Do you have any constructive criticism?

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And then he said, "That's not my wife, that's a tree!" :sarcasm: no...just...no...
:iconneko-tenshi93:
It seems entertaining and deep at the same time , it has a great description and starts really catching ^^

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I believe in Jesus Christ as my savior

don't even dare to look at that! >>> [link]
:iconwriter-on-the-wall:
Well, thanks!

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And then he said, "That's not my wife, that's a tree!" :sarcasm: no...just...no...

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